The hardest kill: little girls lost (part 1)
The hardest Kill little girls lost *For a friend who lost the battle with herself* *I miss you* It began with a nameless woman She ran away from home Her parents never noticed Or maybe they did not...
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Well, this is indeed heart wrenching, but artistically speaking, the use of repetition gives it added strength. Looking forward, although sadly, to part two. ~ Becky
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Well I was just stopping by to actually delete this whole piece. for I was looking again at it on paper and it seemed too broken for my own liking, but I will now have to continue the story/poem/tale...
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intense and vivid Wolf will be looking for part 2 ~ Secret ~
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What a dark and deeply touching write, dear Wolf Forgive my late arrival to read this, hunny But you are not going to take it down, what with all the new smiles gracing its inks are you? Say it isn't...
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Yeah Cree I really want you to deconstruct this monstrosity. Wolf Image by FlamingText.com
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Now what do you mean exactly...you say deconstruct??? Or do you mean to say 'reconstruct'? And I don't think it is a monstrosity...words are always wonderful when they are tempered with great thought,...
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I am not asking for trash and bash but give me some of the "war bonnet" criticism . Pick the flaws you see Wolf Image by FlamingText.com
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m'kay, dearest Wolfie Will do Give me a bit, and I will return my thoughts on it here ~Cree
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Cree no matter what I respect your opinion. Wolf Image by FlamingText.com
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Even with all my typos? ... Still working on it hun ~Cree
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You are a gifted poet, no doubt...and like me sometimes, you really have to watch your spelling more than anything....I suck at spelling...which is why if I am going to post I email myself the poem I...
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What a great write, it's got lots of emotion and passion in it. If you really think it's to broken up try deleting the italicized sections and just let it flow.
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Thanks Guys I appreciate that alot. Wolf Image by FlamingText.com
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Bryan, I took the liberty of correcting the typos, in the hope that there will be a Part 2 I like the first person thoughts in italics, as well as the breaks they provide. They give it a very natural...
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